英文を書いてみたのですが添削してもらえないでしょうか

The Green Mile

This movie was released in 1996, and it was nominated for four Academy

Award. (Best Supporting Actor, Best Picture, Best Sound, and Best Adapted

Screenplay ) The title means road to the electric chair. The scene of this story is on

death row in the 1930. 1930 year was an age of serious great depression in the

United States.

One day, a new inmate arrives. His name is John Coffey who is 7-foot-tall ,

and black male. He convicted of raping and killing two young Girls. At first sight,

John Coffey seems very ferocious, but actual John is gentle giant. Sometimes he

cries, because he afraid of darkness. Surely most audience think he is not man

who can murder young girls. However he was found by police holding corpse.

In fact he has extraordinary healing powers, who reveals by healing warder’s

urinary tract infection and resurrecting a mouse. When John is asked to explain his

power, he merely says that he "took it back. On that day John defy to care girls. John is

innocence. Regrettably, John was sentenced to death, so he can’t escape to death

penalty.

The director have much concern with John’s initial. John’s initial is the same

Jesus Christ. John was modeled on god. He tried to save the human, but he was killed by human. His life resembles Jesus Christ. He had said I was tired before it died.

Perhaps god thought so too.

　This film picks up the problem of race, and false accusation. John’s lawyer

conceive a prejudice against black man. The lawyer thought Black man is the same

as dog. He said even if it is usually obedient, that might bite us suddenly. This idea was

general in 1930. It is not an exaggeration to say that discrimination to the black

executed John.

In the last scene, a hero says everyone walks in a green mile of the life. He

was 108 years old now, but there is no person who lives a long life in this age. He

was helped his sick by John, but he couldn’t save John from electric chair. He

probably received John’s life when he was helped. But he thinks his long life is

visitation. The prisoner wants to live more, but warder who enforces the death

sentence hopes for the death. It is the sarcastic one.

映画「グリーンマイル」についての文です。
わからないところはエキサイト翻訳を使ったので、変なところがあると思います・・・。
でも自分ではそれが変なのかわからなくて困っています。
添削お願いします！

No.2 ベストアンサー 回答者： noname#181603 回答日時： 2009/05/14 10:17

とりあえずざっとみましたが、

This movie was released in 1996, and it was nominated for four Academy

Awards. (Best Supporting Actor, Best Picture, Best Sound, and Best Adapted

Screenplay ) The title means the road to the electric chair. The story is set on a

death row in the 1930. 1930 was the age of serious great depression in the

United States.

One day, a new inmate arrives. His name is John Coffey who is 7-foot-tall ,

and black male. He convicted of raping and killing two young Girls. At first sight,

John Coffey seems very ferocious, but actual John is gentle giant. Sometimes he

cries, because he afraid of darkness. Surely most audience think he is not a man

who can murder young girls. However he was found by police holding a corpse.

In fact he has extraordinary healing powers, which he reveals by healing warder’s

urinary tract infection and resurrecting a mouse. When John is asked to explain his

power, [he merely says that he "took it back."] On that day John defy to care girls. John is

innocence. Regrettably, John was sentenced to death, so he [can’t escape to] death

penalty.

The director have much concern with John’s initial. John’s initial is the same

Jesus Christ. John was modeled on god. He tried to save the human, but he was killed by human. His life resembles Jesus Christ. He had said I was tired before it died.

Perhaps god thought so too.

　This film picks up the problem of race, and false accusation. John’s lawyer

conceives a prejudice against black man. The lawyer consider a black man a dog. He said even if it is usually obedient, that might bite us suddenly. This idea was

generally in 1930. It is not an exaggeration to say that the discrimination to the black

executed John.

In the last scene, a hero says everyone walks in a green mile of the life. He

was 108 years old now, but there is no person who lives a long life in this age. He

was helped his sick by John, but he couldn’t save John from electric chair. He

probably received John’s life when he was helped. But he thinks his long life is kind of

a visitation from John. The prisoner wants to live more, but warder who enforces the death

sentence hopes for the death. It is the sarcastic one.

[ ]内は意味的にも表現的にも再考してみては。

この回答へのお礼

遅くなって申し訳ありません！
こんな拙い文章を読んでいただき感謝します＞＜

とても参考になりました＾＾注意していただいたところはもう一度考えてみます！本当にありがとうございました！

お礼日時：2009/05/20 04:42

No.1 回答者： mabomk 回答日時： 2009/05/14 09:24

どこが変なのかを教えて下さい、「グリーン・マイル」は好きな映画ですので何かしらのアドバイスが出来るかも。

。。。。。。。。。

この回答へのお礼

ご協力ありがとうございます＞＜
文法的におかしいところがあったら教えてほしいです。
特にどう言えばいいかがわからなかったのが、「人は皆人生のグリーンマイルを歩いている」（詳細は違ったかもですが）の英訳がわかりませんでした。

お礼日時：2009/05/14 09:44