英語日記９ あなたはなぜアメリカで勉強したいの

語日記９ あなたはなぜアメリカで勉強したいのか？

すいませんが最近英語力のライティングをあげようと英作文をまいにち書くようにしてます。
レベルのひくい英作文ではずかしいのですが。できれば文法や細かい間違いを指摘して頂けると幸いです。


What do you want to study in USA??

I have 2 reasons why I want to study in USA.
First, I can learn many things than study in Japan.
I dint know yet about that. That may be not good experiences for me.
However, that will absolutely change good things in the future.
Second, I want to make a living by myself.
I have never lived alone, and I think that I will have to live by myself in the future. This time may be a good opportunity to practice. I want to get a good experience in USA.

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No.1 ベストアンサー 回答者： cbm51910 回答日時： 2011/05/25 04:34

>What do you want to study in USA??

→ What do you expect to get out of from studying in the US?

>I have 2 reasons why I want to study in USA.
→ I want to study in the US for two reasons.

>First, I can learn many things than study in Japan.
→ First, it will provide me an excellent opportunity to broaden (expand) my knowledge through studying abroad.

> I dint know yet about that. That may be not good experiences for me.
→ At present my experience is limited to that in Japan, and I do not think that is healthy.

> However, that will absolutely change good things in the future.
→ But I mean to change that by studying abroad.

>Second, I want to make a living by myself.
→ Second, I want to try live alone, and become independent.

>I have never lived alone, and I think that I will have to live by myself in the future.
→ I have never lived alone, but sooner or later, I will have to make my own living.

>This time may be a good opportunity to practice.
→ Living abroad alone, should give me an excellent opportunity to get ready for it.

>I want to get a good experience in USA.
→ Those are the reasons for my wanting to attempt at living in the U.S.


[上記を踏まえての一例]
What do you expect to get out of from studying in the US?

I want to study in the US for two reasons.

First, it will provide me an excellent opportunity to broaden (expand) my knowledge through studying abroad.
At present my experience is limited to that in Japan, and I do not think that is healthy.
But I mean to change that by studying abroad.

Second, I want to try living alone, and become more independent.
I have never lived alone, but sooner or later, I will have to make my own living.
Living abroad alone, should give me an excellent opportunity to get ready for it.

Those are the reasons for my wanting to make an attempt to live in the U.S.