英語日記7 秀才と天才の差

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レベルのひくい英作文ではずかしいのですが。できれば文法や細かい間違いを指摘して頂けると幸いです。

What is the difference between a brilliant person and a genius person.

I think there are two types. First, people who can do something with a lot of make an effort, which is called a brilliant person.
Second, people who can do something without a lot of make an effort, which is called a brilliant genius person.
Suzuki Ichiro is well known for a brilliant person. He is not a genius. He has failed over and over, but he has never given up in his life. That is why he succeed. I cant choose which one is better. However, I would choose a brilliant person if I could choose. It is because I satisfy a lot when I will achieve something. Anyway, most important thing is keep going on.

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No.1 ベストアンサー 回答者： bookaholic 回答日時： 2011/05/22 00:32

What is the difference between a brilliant person and a genius person.

→What is the difference between a brilliant person and a genius?
→brilliant は形容詞ですが、genius はそれだけで「天才な人」

I think there are two types.
→I think there are two types of people.
→「２種類がいる」よりも「２種類の人々がいる」 がいい気がします。

First, people who can do something with a lot of make an effort, which is called a brilliant person.
→First, people who can do things by making a lot of efforts, who are called brilliant.
→出来ることは１つだけじゃないので、things が良いかと。
→make effort のように動詞を使いたければ　by ～ing で「～することで」
→人について話しているので、関係代名詞はwho
→「～する人は、○○な人と呼ばれる」→「～する人は、○○と呼ばれる」で十分だと思います。

Second, people who can do something without a lot of make an effort, which is called a brilliant genius person.
→Second, people who can do things without a lot of efforts, who are called genious.
→上の文と同じ理由で同じ構成にしてみました。

He has failed over and over, but he has never given up in his life.
→He failed over and over, but never gave up his life.
→今は成功しているので、失敗については、過去形が良いかと思います。

That is why he succeed.
→That is why he has been successful.
→何か１つのことに成功したのではなく、全体的に成功した状態、なので、形容詞が良いかもしれません。
→成功した状態は今も続いているので、現在完了。

I cant choose which one is better.
→I can't tell which is better.
→次の文で実際にchoose しているので、「どちらが良いとは言えない」ぐらいが良いかと。

However, I would choose a brilliant person if I could choose.
→However, I would chooose a brilliant person, if I could.
→言葉の重複はなるべく避けた方が良いです。
→if I could はなくても、「選ぶとしたらこっちかなー」というニュアンスは伝わります。仮定法なので。

It is because I satisfy a lot when I will achieve something.
→It is because I feel satisfied a lot when I achieve something.
→satisfy は「満足させる」。「満足する」はbe(feel) satisfied など。
→「～すると満足する」なので、未来形にする必要はありません。

Anyway, most important thing is keep going on.
→Anyway, the most important thing is to keep going on.
→形容詞の最上級はthe をつける。
→「やり続けること」なので、不定詞。

残りの文は良いと思います☆
ご参考まで。