へ、ヘクチーーン！

お願いします。毎日英語の日記を書いてはいるのですが、自分の文法力のなさを最近痛感しておりまして、もう一度文法を勉強しなおしているところです。下記私の日記特に見られても問題ないものなのでよろしければ文法添削頂けると助かります

I have a sore throat and swollen since yesterday. I might have caught a cold. I wanted take an off today, but my wife denied. I went to the workplace reluctantly. Since I have few nasal hairs, I am prone to get disease.
When I see a TV wig commercial, I always think that I wish I could have a hair transplant in my nose. If I transplant nasal hair 100 or so, I would not become disease easily. According to the news, a man allegedly popped a candidate’s husband on the campaign hustings. It seems like he felt annoying their speech. No matter what reason, brutal power is not unacceptable.

No.2 ベストアンサー 回答者： 01-10 回答日時： 2009/07/13 05:48

私は英語の母語話者です。

malibu0426さんの伝えたい意味はほとんど理解した気がしますが、少し文法の間違いがありました。

I have a sore throat and (it has been) swollen since yesterday. I might have caught a cold. I wanted (to take off work) today, but my wife denied (me). I went to the workplace reluctantly. Since I have few nasal hairs, I am prone to (getting) (sickはもっと自然的です).
When I see a TV wig commercial, I always (削除：think that I) wish I could have a hair transplant in my nose. If I transplant (100 nasal hairs) or so, I would not become (sick あるいは ill) easily. According to the news, a man allegedly (punched) a candidate’s husband on the campaign (trail -- 「hustings」は言葉じゃありません). It seems like he felt (annoyed by) their speech. No matter what (the) reason, (brutal powerは厳密にいえば正しいですけど、「violence」の方が自然的です) is not unacceptable.

malibu0426さんの文法間違いは殆ど文法そのものじゃなく、語彙使いや慣用句だと思います。

この回答へのお礼

ありがとうございました。
よく分かりました。また是非よろしくお願いします＜（＿　＿）＞

お礼日時：2009/07/13 13:42

No.1 回答者： remonade 回答日時： 2009/07/13 01:36

エクセレント！