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I want to make friends with many people.

It is because I was too shy to talk with the strangers.
Therefor, I didn't have much friends.

It is obvious I come to talk with strangers possibility more than now and became intimate with a lot of people.

間違い、改善点など指摘してもらえると、ありがたいです＾＾

No.1 ベストアンサー 回答者： marbleshit 回答日時： 2011/02/02 21:47

I want to make friends with many people.

Because I have been too shy to talk with the strangers, so I couldn't make friends a lot before.

If I can come to talk with strangers more frequent than ever before I'll be intimate with a lot of people, I believe.
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I have been too shy to talk with the strangers　現在完了形を使うのを忘れてました(>_<)
とても参考になりました＾＾　またお願いします(>_<) thank you very much.

お礼日時：2011/02/02 22:33