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条件・　日本の次の首相は女性がなるべきだ。　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　I do not agree with this statement that a women should be chosen as the next prime minister of Japan. I have two reasons why I think so. First, I think that women are generally inferior to men concerning physical. Needless to say, work of the prime minister is very hard, so I think that it is hard for women to work as the prime minister. Second, it is too much to say that women should work at home. These days, the birth rate is lower and lower. I think that the reason why this problem happens is that men are worried about their child because women also work outside. Overall, what is important is that women should work at home rather than work outside. (128字）

No.1 ベストアンサー 回答者： vitaminee7 回答日時： 2013/02/13 17:42

a women ?

women


concerning physical ?
in physical stuff.

work of the prime minister ?
the work of prime minister

it is too much to say ?
what do you mean in this context ?

Overall, your case is weaker than you think.

Good luck, man !