英作文の添削お願いします。

新学期が始まったというのに、寮の静けさは意外だった。寮の奥の方で誰かの歩く気配が微かにしたと思うと、すぐに風の音に紛れてしまった。 昔はどこかでラジカセの音楽や笑い声やバイクのエンジン音が響いていたのに、今はそういう生気に満ちた音がすっかり掃き清められたようになっていた。

It's quite a surprise that the dorm was silent though the new school term has started. As soon as I felt someone walking in the back of the dorm, it's soon lost in the sounds of the wind. Formerly, though I frequently hear music from radio-cassette recorders, laughter and roars of bikes'engine noises from somewhere, now, it seems the lively sounds like them have been thoroughly swept away.

No.1 ベストアンサー 回答者： newbies 回答日時： 2011/03/10 22:45

> the dorm was silent the new school term has started

the new school term had started.
かな

＞As soon as I felt someone walking in the back of the dorm, it's soon lost in the sounds of the wind.
代名詞のitに代わる名詞、句、節が見当たらない。

As soon as I felt the sound of waking in the back of the dorm, it's soon lost in the sounds of the wind.
であればit=the sound

Formerlyは主節のIt seems ~に掛かるは。とすると、 Formerly and now It seems thatの構文になってしまう。

従属節のthough I ~句でれば、

though I frequently heard ~ somewhere (before). beforeは無くてもよいと思う。

この回答へのお礼

ありがとうございます。

お礼日時：2011/03/12 21:34