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質問者：todai
質問日時：2016/01/25 17:19
回答数：4件

Yesterday, I was studying Biology, my parents were watching TV, my big sister was reading a book, when a huge traler crashed into our house. How peaceful yeasterday was, it was a very quiet and beautiful day, I love a day like that. No one can be alive now at Kenedy's home. Though you cannot help thinking that it is terrible, I really love the day. That is because I had wanted to kill a Kenedy for a long time. That is to say, it is I that drove the trailer.
There are two men have the same name and face in the world. What's ploblem? Everyone knows the world is so wide that there may be two men who have the same name and face, but... But, It is stranege to have the same brain in common. They have not only the same brain, this is important, but also the same soul. Now, two souls which be at odds will be go at each other. Who should understand but the picture? Yeah, I know how you feel, but.. truth is stranger than fiction....

また，この小説読んでみたいと思う方は挙手してください。
10年後までに完成させてハリーポッター並みにヒットさせます。

補足日時：2016/01/25 17:29
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回答者： ucok
回答日時：2016/01/25 23:26

前半までは、「スペルチェック機能を使わなかったんだなあ。

独特な句読点の使い方は、小説だから、まあ、アリか」で済みますが、後半は何を言わんとしているのかがちょっとわかりにくいので、「誤りがあります」くらいのことしか言えません。でも、ちゃんと整えれば面白い小説になるのかもと期待はします。Todaiさんの英語に対する姿勢、結構、好きですよ。

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回答ありがとうございます！

そうですよね。ちょっと後半かいてるとき「あーこれ伝わんねえなぁ〜あーもどかしー」と思って半泣きでした。この英文をかきおわって「もっともっと英語勉強しないと」と実感しました。英語が読めるだけじゃダメですね。かけるようになりたい！

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お礼日時：2016/01/26 09:31

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回答者： angkolwhat
回答日時：2016/01/25 22:37

どこまで文法かわかりませんが･･･

Yesterday, I was DOING HOMEWORK of MY FAVORITE SUBJECT, biology, my parents were watching A SERIES OF TV DRAMA, AND my sister was reading Harry Potter IN HER ROOM; SHE HATES TO BE DISTRUCTED WHILE READING A BOOK, when a huge TRAILER TRUCK crashed into our house.
WHAT A BEAUTIFUL DAY IT was! IT was ONE OF The MOST quiet and PEACEFUL DAYS. AND THAT WAS THE DAY I WAS LOOKING FORWARD TO. At THE KENNEDYS, no one IS alive NOW. IT WAS HORRIBLE. NO. I loved the day. I LONG wanted to TERMINATE THEM. YOU MAY NOT BELIEVE ME. I WAS THE DRIVER OF THAT TRUCK.
KENNEDY AND THE MAN HAD the same name and face. ANY PROBLEM? The world is SUCH A wide PLACE that there ARE CONSIDERABLE NUMBER OF COUPLES OF men who have the same name and THE SAME face. But..., OURS ARE A BIT DIFFERENT. AND THIS IS MOST IMPORTANT. WE HAD the same brain and the same soul AS WELL! Now, THE two identical souls WERE at odds and GOING IN DIFFERENT DIRECTIONS. Who COULD EVER THOUGHT OF THAT? I know how you feel..., but truth is stranger than fiction. So IS OURS.

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暇つぶしに付き合ってくれてありがとうございます。素直に嬉しいです。

いやー
僕の文章まだまだっすわ。
しかし、これでもかなり書けたほうです。
僕のこの英文もかなり自信あるんですけどね。
暗記した英文繋げてるだけですが。

PS・大文字みにくいです。親切設計のつもりでしてくれたのはありがたいのですが。

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お礼日時：2016/01/25 22:49